Let's see what I can do, I know it's a short story but a few questions.
Are you leaving Aedan 's look up to the reader? You don't ever really decribe him, this might work for some but I have this blob in my mind for the main character. I know the writer has a picture in thier mind, I want to read what you are thinking. (This is something I am horrible at and probably why I am not brave enough to go beyond drabbles. )
Is everyone going to know what the Hibernian plains look like? Later you have an excellent description of the village or not important and leave it alone? :)
In one section you have Aedan not being carried home cause he's to heavy and then he is while working on the carving. It's an endearing gesture but what changed that Aedan could be carried home?
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Date: 2016-09-28 05:55 am (UTC)Let's see what I can do, I know it's a short story but a few questions.
Are you leaving Aedan 's look up to the reader? You don't ever really decribe him, this might work for some but I have this blob in my mind for the main character. I know the writer has a picture in thier mind, I want to read what you are thinking. (This is something I am horrible at and probably why I am not brave enough to go beyond drabbles. )
Is everyone going to know what the Hibernian plains look like? Later you have an excellent description of the village or not important and leave it alone? :)
In one section you have Aedan not being carried home cause he's to heavy and then he is while working on the carving. It's an endearing gesture but what changed that Aedan could be carried home?